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Zer0 Jun 15 2011, 03:11 PM Post #1
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NOPE.

Anyways... i need a critique.

THIS PLEASE

Spelling errors, page errors, breaks, different browers ( i refuse to use anything other than chrome ), stuff like that.

Winners get a sweet high five.
 
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me to create a identity for
should be:
me to create an identity for

that was unique and can stand out on its own
might sound better as
that was unique and could stand out on its own (Since it wasn't created yet, it could, not can. Y'know?)

be the place to go to for well... Everything Cooling.
should be
be the place to go for, well... Everything Cooling.

Daniel came to us, through a posting we made looking for a Designer to help our Church out for our directory.
Lose the comma after us.

who worked on it, had
Lose the comma after it.

Definitely a great worker, and talent!.
Lose the period at the end, and possibly say talented instead of talen.

Hire me
Might look better as
Hire me! (Seems more inviting, or just a period if yo don't like enthusiasm. =P)

I do beautiful illustrations, logos and print design
Maybe add an S to design? Unless it's an area, like "network security." Not sure.

I am looking for an entry level design position, where I can
I'm not sure if it's correct with the comma, but I know it'd be correct without a comma. I think it screws with the word-flow.

Also, I'm using Opera browser, and not having any issues with displays/page format/all that jazz. Hope this helps! (Also, I didn't look at Portfolio, because I'm a lazy bastard.)
 
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