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| Michael Narritive; Profile Made. | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Jul 16 2008, 07:21 PM (174 Views) | |
| Michael | Jul 16 2008, 07:21 PM Post #1 |
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Trainer Name: Michael Narritive Trainer Gender: ![]() Trainer Age: Fifteen Personal Goals: Michael wants to become a Pokémon Master. He dreams to collect a full set of dedicated Pokémon on his team and travel the world defeating other trainers. Trainer Biography: Michael has always been a city boy. He began his life in luscious Saffron City (located in Kanto), where his father had let him play with his father's first Pokémon; a Spearow. He loved this Spearow dearly and when Michael had turned eight, he let him keep the Spearow. The Spearow pecked at Michael and he was slightly scared of it, resorting to the point where he locked it out of his room. When Michael turned ten, he was able to become a Pokémon Trainer. After two years of time spent with Spearow, he had realized that Pokémon weren't as scary as he thought they were. He had visited his father (who was away at Celadon City on a business errand for a month) and given him his Spearow back, realizing that Pokémon only truly love their owner. Michael's dad had told him that he was very mature and would pay to take him to a new region to begin as a Pokémon Trainer. As a present, his father presented him with a Lickitung. Days later (after spending much time with his newly founded Lickitung) Michael had taken a cruise over to the luxurious yet dangerous town of Hurst, in which he would be most familiar with. Michael was thrilled to finally begin his journey. Trainer Appearance: Michael has determined brown eyes and messy brown hair. He often wears a black hat with a large M on it. Michael's clothes depend on the weather. On hot days he either wears t-shirts or polo shirts and shorts. Some of his favorites tees includes one with a Poké Ball on it and one with a Bulbasaur that says, "Time to Kick some Grass!" On colder days he often wears multiple layers of long-sleeved shirts and jeans. At times he may wear sweats. Most of the time Michael is wearing running shoes, and if he is braving a large mountain or obstacle he will swap his shoes for some boots. Both the sneakers and boots are very durable and do not break easily. He carries a large backpack, as Michael is a bit of a pack rat and needs a place to keep all of his stuff. It is red with maroon stripes. Michael's main build is lean and he has little muscle but long legs and arms. Michael has the perfect body of a track runner, much less a wrestler. Poketech Color: :techred Starter Town: Hurst Starter Pokémon: ![]() Edited by Michael, Jul 16 2008, 08:14 PM.
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| Lurk | Jul 16 2008, 07:34 PM Post #2 |
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Could you add how you got the Lickitung to your Bio? And please lengthen your Appearance to 8 sentences. Don't make them choppy, either. |
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| Michael | Jul 16 2008, 07:43 PM Post #3 |
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Oh, I didn't realize we started with the Pokémon. Edited. |
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| Lurk | Jul 16 2008, 08:06 PM Post #4 |
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Your appearance has a few choppy sentences that just get cut-off from one another and aren't really smooth. And splitting your Bio into to separate sections wouldn't be bad, either. Please fix these problems and then someone will reevaluate. |
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| Michael | Jul 16 2008, 08:15 PM Post #5 |
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I was a little confused with the choppy sentences so I just revamped most of it and I split the bio into two separate sections. |
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| Lurk | Jul 16 2008, 08:17 PM Post #6 |
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K, looks good now. Approved. |
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