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| Tweet Topic Started: Oct 23 2006, 03:01 PM (57 Views) | |
| wanky414 | Oct 23 2006, 03:01 PM Post #1 |
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The crowd roared and cheered as the finalists stepped up to the arena getting ready to give it all they've got at the finals of the most important tournament to trainers -- The Annual Evergreen Championship. This tournament always hosted the most action-packed battles that were filled with the most powerfull Pokémon in the world. The two trainers were more anxious then they had been in their young lives. Joe and Bob were both overwhelming gifted trainers that were both only 14 and they had already traveled most of the world with their Pokémon. Joe and Bob were both walking from the opposite directiong into the middle of the field with a fierce fire burning in their eyes, both wanting to win as much as the other one. As they got to te center they shook hands and the words "Good Luck" came out of their mouths very softly. They both stared at eachother in the eyes, not with hatred but worry, worrying if the person they were staring at was going to be the one who ruins their dream, only to fulfill their own. They walked back to their positions and turned around facing eachother waiting for the key to start. "And now the arena will be revealed" said the announcer. The crowd got louder and louder as the arena raised. The arena wasn't too complex, The middle of the arena was regular ground with some rocks on it and on the outside there was about 5m of water and on the outer rectangle of the water there more rocks to stop the flow of water."Alright lets get the final round started!!!" said the announcer,"the trainers may now choose their first Pokémon." Joe was the first to pull a pokeball out of his belt and threw it in the air to reveal a Scizor. Bob also threw a pokeball in the air and out came a Donphan."Ready....Begin the battle!" And those were the magical words that made the crowd go crazy as they cheered for their favourite trainer. My fingers hurt so I'm take a brake and get to the action and battles later :D |
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| wanky414 | Oct 24 2006, 01:52 PM Post #2 |
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"Alright Scizor, Quick Attack" Joe said as his Scizor began moving towards the Donphan with incrdible speed."Roll into a ball using Defence Curl Donphan" and just as it was told it quickly rolled up just as the Scizor hit it. The Quick Attack had made Donphan roll back a couple of feet but didn't cause any damage to it. "Don't back off now Scizor, use Silverwind" The scizor started flapping its wings extremely fast creating a gust of wind going towards Donphan's direction. "Donphan use Dig" The Donphan rolled into a ball and spun really fast into the ground going underneath it just in time to evade the Silverwind. "K now quickly come out and hit Scizor" yelled Joe hoping his strategy would work considering Scizor's speed. "Double Team Scizor!" The Scizor moved very quickly all around the field hoping its enemy wouldn't hit it." The Donphan came out missing the Scizor as its mirror images followed it untill it stopped and it was just them on the field. "Scizor Slash!" The Scizor quickly Slashed the Donphan before it even had a chance to do anything. The Donphan was sent flying into one of the rocks. The Donphan was hurt but it could handle more than that. "Ok Donphan lets do this! Use Rollout!" Donphan rolled up into a ball and rolled towards Scizor with intense force. A sweat drop came from Joe's head as he wasn't sure what to do. The Rollout hit Scizor but it only sent it sliding back a bit. Joe knew the Rollout would only intensify after every blow."Keep at it Donphan" Bob said to it. The Rollout hit Scizor again but the hit was harder this time knocking it to the ground. Joe was standing there thinking of an idea that would work. "Again Donphan!" The Donphan kept rolling getting closer and closer to Scizor. "Dodge it Scizor!" Scizor heard its trainers command but it was too late and hit with an even harder blow. Joe knew that one more hit would cause his Scizor to faint but out of nowhere a smirk came on his face. "K Scizor just put your arms out and get ready" Scizor did as it was told but it wasn't sure this was going to work. Most of the crowd went silent as they waited for Joe's plan to unfold. Donphan was only about 5 meters away from Scizor now and kept coming closer and just as its armor from the Rollout touched Scizor... "Counter it!" Joe said and Scizor grabbed Donphans tusks that were hanging from the side and threw the creature over him right into the water. Bob quickly withdrew Donphan into his Pokeball and the crowd went crazy and cheered. "Good try Donphan, You were awesome" Bob said at the Pokeball. As he put that Pokeball away he drew out another one. "Ok Now its your turn Machamp!" K well I'm done for now. Feel free to put comment or suggestions down if you want. |
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| Deleted User | Oct 24 2006, 02:45 PM Post #3 |
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Cool! I do have a few comments though... 1.) Joe and Bob? Are these names generic on purpose? 2.) You didn't develop Joe and Bob's characters at all. Do they know eafch other? What do they look like, sound like, etc. 3.) Each new line of dialogue should start a new paragraph. Makes it all much easier to read. That's all I got. Keep up the good work. |
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| wanky414 | Oct 24 2006, 06:09 PM Post #4 |
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I only chose the names Joe and Bob cuz theyre the first names that came to mind lol and yeah I didn't bother developing their characters at all cuz I thought it would get too boring if I went into detail about the characters. Well I'm probably gonna do the next part tomorrow or some other time cuz Im gonna call it a night and do hmwk now. Peace. |
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| Deleted User | Oct 24 2006, 06:30 PM Post #5 |
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Boring? No. Characters=Interesting. |
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