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I Do Poetry; This 1 got published in a book
Topic Started: Jun 19 2007, 11:28 PM (312 Views)
Zabuza4
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HEY

I saw you again to day
It was the just like any other day
Since the day we met I couldn稚 get you out of my mind
I just know 1 day you値l be mine
I値l be yours & we値l be ours
All the hours
That I知 not with you it hurts
Ever since i saw you in that mini skirt
I hope some day
Some way
You値l sway
My way
And i'll say
Hey
Jus like any other day
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I know it's free verse but it seems to be lacking a lot of structure and depth..
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Zabuza4
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You write poetry 2???? well it got published
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I like it, just the word mini skirt seems weird to me like its not something relevant to the poem.
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Kakashi Elite
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LOL, I agree with Davis there. How did that get published?! Anyways, it's pretty good but not all that great if you catch my drift :P

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Yea & about the mini skirt i not a serious person & this poem was getting too serious & i couldn't find anything else that rhymed with hurts
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You couldn't? If you want to be a poet, then I suggest you expand your vocabulary? I rap, so I know what it is trying to rhyme something, it's not that hard. But I still can't believe you got this published?! Who published it, and why did they?

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that goes with the poem????, Poetry.com, "Great poetic talents"
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What goes with the poem? Explain things in your posts :P

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You got it published at poetry.com? Lmao, I know that place, basically ANY poem you submit get "publishes" and it's an "amazing" poem to them, submitted 2 just for fun because I love to write and they both could have been published but I wasn't going to pay the moeny for some crap site like that, sadly... (my opion on the site, sorry if it offends anyone)

As for what i think about your poem....there are some grammer mistakes that annoy me and mess up the flow, the little mini skirt thing was a bit odd but did fit in with the whole rhyme. I really loved it as it got further in, it was cute and flowed really well.
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