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Red Dusk Rains; Vega's Story
Topic Started: Jun 6 2007, 01:58 PM (419 Views)
kaiori
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I think that this was a really good chapter and beginning to your story. Keep up the good work and I can't wait til the next chapter =)
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Othnieus
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well, you wont have to wait any longer ^_^ Yeah, i finally got around to typin it up, heheh. Sry about it taking so long. Here it is, Chapter two of Red Dusk Rains..

.Chapter Two.

Al DeBaran, that morning, was a tranquill scene. The gulls and pidgeons perched on the hour hand of the clocktower, which rested squarely at 9. A few people went about their buissiness in the city of the canal. Merchants rode gandalas, selling their wears. It was a bright, warm, peaceable day. A twisting , swirling energy formed a flickering blue cylindrical portal, out of which, a crusader stepped, and guided a sage out by the hand. The pair walked down to the steps of southern Al DeBaran, near the entrance to the city.

Vega turned to Amelia slowly, and hessitantly asked, "Lady Amelia, are you going to be alright?" Amelia looked lost in deep thought for a short moment before replying, "Vega, dont worry about me... ill be fine," she lied,"Vega! I told you not to call me that!" "Yes, Lady Amelia." he replied obediently, and unnaware. "Ugh.... just how many times must i tell you? we've known eachother forever, and yet you still call me that! JUST Amelia." she groaned. "Now why dont you go and make yourself useful, and find us some breakfast," she joked, giggling as she playfully pushed him away, "Felix and I are going for a short walk around town."

Felix jumped off of her head, mewwed softly, and then strutted off, oppinionatedly, after her. "Hey, dont wander off too far!" Vega shouted after her in vain. Amelia started to walk down the streets of Al DeBaran, though the sole purpose of her walk was to bury her head in her copy of "The Sage Diary".

Amelia was completely enthralled in the book, she was so utterly distracted, that she didnt even notice that she was walking on a collision course with another person. The man looked quite strange, as he shambled zombie-like with his eyes closed, over the bridge. He was basking in the sun's warm light, feeling it on his face as he quietly mumbled to himself. The two were completely oblivious to the world around them and their impending collision.

CRASH!! Amelia was knocked back onto her rear, on the pavement. However, the stranger was not nearly as lucky. "WHOAH!!!!!" exclaimed the man, followed by a loud, SPLASH!! Amelia picked herself up and leaned over the edge of the bridge. She spotted the man trying, in cain, to pull himself up out of the water and onto the concrete walkway. She stared at the man flailing about in the water for a few moments, then asked, trying to hold back her laughter, "Erm, Sir? Do you need any help? Sir? "The man stopped thrashing about and finally noticed the girl for the first time. "Oh! Yes, Miss!" He exclaimed, "Help would be much appreciated!" Amelia hurriedly stepped off the bridge and down the stairs to the water's edge. Amelia stretched out her right arm to the man, which he grabbed quickly. She pulled back with all her might, and the man flopped ashore.

"Thank you Miss!" the sopping wet man replied, with a smile. "Oh, no problem, Sir.",she replied, "It was all my fault, i was reading and not paying attention." "Oh, no," , the man replied," It was completely my fault, i wasnt minding where i was going." "Oh..." replied amelia, "well, who might you be stranger?" The man stood up and straightened himself out before answering her, "*ahem* I, kind lady, am Othnieus Martel, An exorcist, from the Prontera Parish," he bowwed,"At Your service.

And who might you be, Miss?" "I am Amelia Rachelle Albell." The man replied in a surprised tone of voice, "Albell? Are you, by any chance, related to the governor of the Schwartzvald Republic?" "Oh yes, He is my father, he is sending me to prontera to deliver a letter to King Tristam III." she responded. "Oh.... well isnt that something...OH!", Othnieus said in quick realization. "othnieus! this is great! It would seem that a door has opened!", He said to himself, in a louder than intended voice.

Now, slightly disturbed by the man's odd mannerisms, she asked, "Mr. Martel, what ever could you mean?" "Oh! im sorry, was i talking to myself again? Its an odd thing that i have started to do without even noticing, if it troubles you, i will try to stop." he said. "Well... thats good, it was slightly strange... But what is this about a door?", she inquiried. "Oh, well, a few days ago, my rosary broke, I beleive it was an omen. Yes, definitely an omen. I was on my way to prontera to buy a new one... Well, eventually. Anyway, I beleive such a meeting as ours could be no accident. We are both headed to the same city, how about i venture with you? I Beleive that if i dont, some grevious horror might befall you."

Amelia decided that the man was truthfull, and that it wouldnt be a bad thing to have a priest accompany her on her journey to the Rune Midgarts Kingdom. "Alright, Mr.Martel, I accept your proposal to join my escourt." "Oh, thank you, Ms. Albell." ,Othnieus responded. It was about this time that Amelia remembered that she had sent Vegalyon off to fetch breakfast. "Oh!, i had completely forgotten about Vega!" ,she exclaimed, "He is my escourt to prontera, we had better go look for him."

About this time, Vega stood in line at a merchant selling food near the northwestern end of Al DeBaran. He was in deep thought about the war, and he wonderred if Yuno could defend against the seige of Arunfeltz. He was so concerned about such matters that he didnt notice that he was next up to buy his groceries. A rather irritated wizard standing behind him yelled, "Hey! You, the tin can! Get your groceries and move!" Vega appologised, "A thousand appologies, sir, i wasnt thinking." RIIIIP!!! Vega turned around and noticed the Wizard's Robes were in tatters, as he turned around and found peices of the cloth caught in the links of his armor.

The Wizard's eyes burned with a firey rage. "IDIOT! MORON! that robe cost me millions of zeny! It was custom made and enchanted! It was one of a kind! You will pay for your for your bafoonerry!" The Wizard waved a rather lethal-looking stave at Vega's face. Vega stared with a harsh, cool, look upon his face for a few moments. He realized there was no way out of this situation. The Wizard surrounded himself with a coating of pure energy. Vega pulled his sheild off of his back, but he hessitated, and chose not to remove his sword from its sheild-scabbard. The wizard, growing more irate for by the second, exploded, "You will bow to me now and appologise!", he commanded. "I bow to no MAN.", Vega countered. The wizard yelled at the top of his lungs..."FIRE BOLT!!!!" a rain of fire poured out of the heavens, heading directly for Vega. At the last second, Vega was able to yank himself out of the way, diving a few feet away from where he stood before, now covered in black soot.

The Wizard, with a malevolent gaze turned once again to the crusader, and yelled out..... "COLD BOLT!!!" Vega rolled onto his back and put his large mirror sheild up infront of him. CRASH!!! Large shards of Ice splintered off around him, though the brunt of the impact was blocked by His sheild. At that moment, Amelia and Othnieus arrived. "Vega!" Amelia screamed. "Hey! there is to be no fighting within the city walls!", Othnieus chimed in. "Silence, you curs!!!" The wizard yelled at them, "Ill Destroy you all too!!" then, the wizard prepared himself in a casting posture, he was preparing to summon a spell of High Magic. The Wizard yelled.... "METEOR........STORM!!!!" the wizard was preparing to summon meteors, meteors that could destroy the city in his madness.

"LEX DIVINA!!!!" Othnieus called out in a harsh tone, his eyes narrowing into slits. "I will NOT permit you to harm anyone else!" The Wizard tried to finish his incantation, but no sound came from his mouth. "Now why dont you sit down and cool off for a moment." Othnieus walked up to the merchant and handed him a bottle filled with a slimey green liquid. "Sir, give this to that Wizard when he finally decides to calm down." The merchant agreed, still in awe of what he had just beheld. Othnieus walked over to Vega and knelt down beside him. He lifted up his hands and pressed them to Vega's shoulders. A warm glowing green light came around his hands. "Heal!", vega said, " Now, shall we be off? i do beleive we should be heading out before too long." Othnieus said with his usual smile back upon his face as he walked down the road towards Al DeBaran's southern gate.

"Amelia... who is that man?" asked Vega, in a bewildered sort of tone. "That is Othnieus Martel," replied Amelia, in the same bewildered state," ive asked him to join us....But....Now im not sure who he is..."
.Chapter 2 Concluded.
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Sry about it taking so long.


Yeah trust me thats fast typeing. Hell ive got my whole story planned out but im just too damn lazy to type. Keep writeing yay?

Can't wait for next chapter and mabye one day ill get around to mine if im not so lazy
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Oth, im really enjoying your story. i think that you write well, your imagery really draws me in and along with the personality of your characters keeps me interested. i cant wait to read more!
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I have been taking a hiiatus from writing the story for a while, though i think i will start today seeing as how the server team cant get their arses in gear and get the servers back up... and to think, it was supposed to be a short five minute issue...
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I was wondering when you were gonna update. It's cool that you're gonna start again soon. /no1
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